
A man crosses the street in rain, one long last step over the curb. His coffee cup out at an exaggerated distance, a comically small cup to be sheperding through the crowded city street. He's on time. Two more blocks. Past the Thai place, past the laundromat, past the diner. He'll be there soon. Two keys -- one for the gate, one for the door. It's an old building, tight turns on the stairs. Small rooms. No closets. He takes off his shoes & feels the moist cold of his socks as he walks to the window, twisting the fading light into the living room. There's a chair he'll leave behind in eight months when he moves home (but he doesn't know that now), brocaded, low, a color he can't name, springs he can't ignore. He reaches & turns on the TV. His team almost never televised here, far from home. His team will receive. It's a Sunday in January. 1995.
From a project with students, using the first line of Shoulders by Naomi Shihab Nye
6 responses to “city life.”
I found myself following the subject with rapt attention. There’s a concreteness to the description that makes the scene very real, almost cinematic. The “comically small cup” and “moist cold of socks” pull me into the setting like magnets.
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aw thanks friend!
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A really compelling piece–such careful details. I especially liked the description of the chair–“a color he can’t name,/springs he can’t ignore.”
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Thanks so much—this month of writing has revealed how many sensory images are right at our fingertips:)
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You take the reader to the exact place, walking alongside the man–you? I like how you show it’s the last time to be in the Chicago…”one long last step over the curb.” and “a chair he’ll leave behind…(but he doesn’t know that now)…” Your students are lucky to have you write such a strong piece as an example. And, of course, using Naomi Shihab Nye’s poetry as inspiration. Your writing is incredible.
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Thank you for your kindness & your generous reading of this memory 🙂
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