moon, light.

March 17th, 2022

Our backyard, about 9:30pm March 14, 2022

The hail stopped. Rain fades.
Soft clouds frame & shroud the moon  
-- a drone hums above.

March 17, 2022

Joel Garza

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12 responses to “moon, light.”

Tracy Brosch says:

March 17, 2022 at 9:02 am

What an interesting combo! …technology AND nature in haiku 🙂

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- Joel Garza says:
  
  March 17, 2022 at 9:10 am
  
  Right? when I saw the dash of the drone light in my photo, I was, all, “Oh, sh1t, that’s line three of a haiku right there”
  
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eddiehren says:

March 17, 2022 at 9:20 am

Very cool. I love how a well written haiku can capture so much. The drone in the pic and the “drone” that sometimes hums from power lines (at least in my back yard) gives that line dual meaning, too. Thanks for sharing!

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- Joel Garza says:
  
  March 17, 2022 at 9:24 am
  
  Thanks for reading — lucky to have thoughtful readers like you
  
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Radutti says:

March 17, 2022 at 9:21 am

You had me in the first half. Love the way you use punctuation, felt like there was an intentionally abrupt shift from natural beauty to artificial nuisance. ? Thanks for writing!

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- Joel Garza says:
  
  March 17, 2022 at 9:24 am
  
  Thanks so much! This video really helped me understand the power & possibilities of a haiku’s third line https://youtu.be/yUDuRwKwh8k
  
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Book Dragon says:

March 17, 2022 at 9:49 am

The moon! Your photo sets the ambiance and your poem alights us away.

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margaretsmn says:

March 17, 2022 at 1:28 pm

The drone was unexpected. What a wonderful picture of the full moon.

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- Joel Garza says:
  
  March 17, 2022 at 2:15 pm
  
  The drone was *totally* unexpected, lol. Glad you enjoyed it!
  
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lynnedorfman says:

March 17, 2022 at 2:33 pm

I love poetry and found your haiku to be surprising – I had to read it twice. A drone? So unexpected! And then I read your comments above. Ha! I get it! Your photo can inspire more poems!

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- Joel Garza says:
  
  March 17, 2022 at 8:19 pm
  
  Oh, thanks, friend — I’ve got a couple lined up inspired by photos 🙂
  
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KevinHodgson (@dogtrax) says:

March 27, 2022 at 3:44 pm

I like the “fades” and “frame” alliterative connections.
Kevin

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